Design critique, por favor. (Bandwidth warning...)

[trisho.]

Hey all, I’m doing a (paid) design test for a mobile services company. The assignment was to create a landing page for their ringtone, wallpaper, etc. services. The market is teenagers & tweens. The examples they gave me are:

h*tp://us.mobi.dada.net/splash/specialoffer_us1.html
h*tp://offers.blinko.com/?offer_id=2995&affil=3955-cingular
www.thumbplay.com/partner.do?pName=65a&pTrx=free_ringtones&WT_mc.id=4045

Any feedback is super appreciated. The image is 800 x 930something. I hope that’s not too big for some of you.



Thanks...