10-09-2006, 08:42 AM
I agree with Big Daddy Cool and Baby Tats about the 9.99 typeface. The lowercase t really looks bad to me. It looks like it belongs on a web page selling discount web hosting services. It doesn't look much like what's used in the instructions; same family, maybe, but they don't work well together.
The 9.99 text might also benefit from being rotated a smidge, or maybe moved to the right, and I second the comment about making the photo fit the perspective of the phone, maybe desaturated a bit too. And the watermark on the phone is distracting, as is the fact that it's a mirror image.
The faint ghost lines, horizontal and vertical, that sorta run between the artists and the instructions -- what are they for?
The picture of the Killers really doesn't fit with everything else, but I don't know there's much you could do to make the colors fit.
I don't care for the arrow. It's too straight, too clean. I understand it would be clunky if it were opaque, but because it's semitransparent it looks as though it was supposed to appear drawn on the crumpled paper. At the very least it should fir the style of the heading.
I'm also not sure about the circles around the photos, whether they're too straight and clean, but maybe it's good they stand out a little. Maybe they'd look better if they popped out just a little more.
I wouldn't put any shadow under the phone.
It's a nice piece.
The 9.99 text might also benefit from being rotated a smidge, or maybe moved to the right, and I second the comment about making the photo fit the perspective of the phone, maybe desaturated a bit too. And the watermark on the phone is distracting, as is the fact that it's a mirror image.
The faint ghost lines, horizontal and vertical, that sorta run between the artists and the instructions -- what are they for?
The picture of the Killers really doesn't fit with everything else, but I don't know there's much you could do to make the colors fit.
I don't care for the arrow. It's too straight, too clean. I understand it would be clunky if it were opaque, but because it's semitransparent it looks as though it was supposed to appear drawn on the crumpled paper. At the very least it should fir the style of the heading.
I'm also not sure about the circles around the photos, whether they're too straight and clean, but maybe it's good they stand out a little. Maybe they'd look better if they popped out just a little more.
I wouldn't put any shadow under the phone.
It's a nice piece.