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Hey all, I’m doing a (paid) design test for a mobile services company. The assignment was to create a landing page for their ringtone, wallpaper, etc. services. The market is teenagers & tweens. The examples they gave me are:
h*tp://us.mobi.dada.net/splash/specialoffer_us1.html
h*tp://offers.blinko.com/?offer_id=2995&affil=3955-cingular
www.thumbplay.com/partner.do?pName=65a&pTrx=free_ringtones&WT_mc.id=4045
Any feedback is super appreciated. The image is 800 x 930something. I hope that’s not too big for some of you.
Thanks...
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I don't know if you got to choose the artists, but as part of the target audience(In theory anyway) I know one of them, The Killers.
From a purely design/marketing standpoint it looks good though, not too complex, not too simple, and portrays the stuff in a good way.
My 2 cents anyway
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the tween in me just started paying $9.99 to fuel my ringtone indecision
my only suggestion is to set apart the sign up form. perhaps in a similar manner as the headline
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I didn't get to pick the artists 'chip, but I have heard of all of them (unfortunately Fergie as well).
That's a really good point mattkime. Thank you. What is your ringtone plan?
It's kind of funny, I'm probably the last person who should be doing this job. I'm a darn near Luddite when it comes to mobile phones. The only fancy web/communication feature I use on my phone is text messaging, that's it. I didn't get a colour phone until almost two years ago. Didn't really care.
If I pass this test, I'll get to freelance with the company for two weeks at a daily rate building more landing pages and HTML emails. If they like my work during that time, I'll receive an offer for full time work.
Let's see how this goes...
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Make the 1-2-3 lighter/brighter so it contrasts more with the paint splatter.
The typeface used for the $9.99 offer, etc. is horrible.
The 'Shareefa' and '2' splatters are too blurry compared to the other ones.
use a different photo in the phone and skew it properly so it doesn't look like you just copied the other photo (which you did, i assume)
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shadow under the phone so it doesn't look like it's floating.
#2: drop 'and' down to the next line and tighten up the leading.
What's up on the left of the Ne-Yo image?
tighten up the leading and reduce the type size a bit on the 'Get them now on your phone ' so the text fits better within the splatter
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>>>Make the 1-2-3 lighter/brighter so it contrasts more with the paint splatter.
I had the light green colour in there but a friend suggested using the dark red to match it with the heading...i prefer the light green actually.
>>>The typeface used for the $9.99 offer, etc. is horrible.
Why? it is the same as the one for the directions. Is it horrible there too and what makes it horrible?
>>>The 'Shareefa' and '2' splatters are too blurry compared to the other ones.
I was wondering about this one as well...
>>>use a different photo in the phone and skew it properly so it doesn't look like you just copied the other photo (which you did, i assume)
I was only given five photos to use. I didn't want to pick another artist because who knows if they the usage rights or not...
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I figured it was the same as the directions, and I don't love it there, but I think the bold/reg is helping me to not concentrate on how ugly the type is. Plus, the numbers '9.99' really stand out as what i like to call ungood®
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maybe put their logo on the phone's screen as an alternative?
